Man, I posted this up over in Tune of the Day thread - it kinda blew me away a little.
Above and beyond any production detail that might need fine tuning (and I personally don't think it "needs" anything really) - the whole vibe and even the long-ass arrangement really work for me. You're on to something. Keep it up. I love the whole tribal postpunk floor tom thing, the little dubwise accents, the spoken sample... If anything, maybe finding a really good, conscious poet could only make the whole thing hit harder.
PS - really like yr jungle mixes as Harbinger1989 too.