Any suggestions for this track?

Dubs & Tunes for Feedback
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I make all my sounds with the exception of a few virtual instruments and samples. I listen to alot of electronic music and I just find my tracks sound a little to video gamey? How would you suggest I sound more organic and less computery/video gamey?

https://soundcloud.com/dhji/murder/s-xb2Dw

UPDATE 1:

I actually pitched the original down because it sounded better lower but this update I kept the normal pitch and added some more highs and also removed filter on the hats. I also took out the intro:

https://soundcloud.com/dhji/murder-update-1/s-jZ1ch

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i’m not 100% sure what the difference is, but cool track.

3

It’s the added highs.

Personally I think it sounds kinda lifeless. A little too computerized. Idk how to make it less like that.

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UPDATE 1:

I actually pitched the original down because it sounded better lower but this update I kept the normal pitch and added some more highs and also removed filter on the hats. I also took out the intro:

https://soundcloud.com/dhji/murder-update-1/s-jZ1ch